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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Proof Readers Needed!
We are going to be ordering invites with in the next week or so,, please CHECK the below items and see if I am missing something-
Because you have shared
In our lives with your
Friendship and love, we
Kimberly XXX
and
Greg XXX
Together with our parents
Invite you to share our joy as we
Exchange Marriage vows
On Saturday
The Eighth of November
Two Thousand and Eight
at Five o'clock in the Evening at
Bay Shore United Methodist Church
Then for the RSVP card
We look forward to celebrating with you.
Please reply by October 1st
M___________________________
___ Accepts with pleasure
___ Declines with regret
Message edited 5/12/2008 2:10:58 PM.
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Posted 5/12/08 1:23 PM 
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ttw910
One month!
Member since 8/07 1040 total posts
Wedding Date:
9/26/2008 3:30 PM
Wed. Location:
The Hamlet Golf & Country Club
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
You just need to change Eight to Eighth.
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Posted 5/12/08 1:25 PM
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Maria31
285 Invited ::FAINT::
Member since 8/07 2678 total posts
Wedding Date:
10/11/2008 2:00 PM
Wed. Location:
North Ritz Club
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Should be the
Eighth of November! 
ETA: I'd also have the coma before your names be after "love" and not after "we"... I think 
AND in the RSVP card.. should be forward, and not foward.
Message edited 5/12/2008 1:28:51 PM.
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Posted 5/12/08 1:25 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by ttw910
You just need to change Eight to Eighth.
Got it! Thank you!!!
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Posted 5/12/08 1:27 PM
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bluekat16
4 months!!!
Member since 1/08 7569 total posts
Wedding Date:
12/27/2008 4:00 PM
Wed. Location:
Jericho Terrace - Dome Room
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Looks good...you just need to change Eight to Eighth
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Posted 5/12/08 1:28 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by Maria31
Should be the
Eighth of November!
ETA: I'd also have the coma before your names be after "love" and not after "we"... I think
as in
Friendship and Love, We
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Posted 5/12/08 1:28 PM
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KK Holiday
FINAL COUNT: 106
YAY!!!
Member since 9/07 6483 total posts
Wedding Date:
9/19/2008 4:00 PM
Wed. Location:
an LI vineyard
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
sounds lovely Kim!
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Posted 5/12/08 1:29 PM
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Espo22
I am Mrs. Esposito
Member since 11/06 44430 total posts
Wedding Date:
5/17/2008 2:30 PM
Wed. Location:
Jericho Terrace
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
it should be "forward" not foward
also something small but you can put five o'clock
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Posted 5/12/08 1:29 PM
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Maria31
285 Invited ::FAINT::
Member since 8/07 2678 total posts
Wedding Date:
10/11/2008 2:00 PM
Wed. Location:
North Ritz Club
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by Kimbalina
Posted by Maria31
Should be the
Eighth of November!
ETA: I'd also have the coma before your names be after "love" and not after "we"... I think
as in
Friendship and Love, We
Yes, I think that reads better but I could be wrong.
I also found something else...
On the RSVP card.. it should be forward, and not foward. Other than that, looks good to me!!! 
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Posted 5/12/08 1:30 PM
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LuvMyAlfonse
Score.
Member since 7/06 9867 total posts
Wedding Date:
6/27/2008 4:30 PM
Wed. Location:
Land's End
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
I agree with all the suggestions and have none to add...
Sounds great Kim!
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Posted 5/12/08 1:31 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by Espo22
it should be "forward" not foward
also something small but you can put five o'clock
Got it!!!
Thank you!
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Posted 5/12/08 1:31 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by Maria31
Posted by Kimbalina
Posted by Maria31
Should be the
Eighth of November!
ETA: I'd also have the coma before your names be after "love" and not after "we"... I think
as in
Friendship and Love, We
Yes, I think that reads better but I could be wrong.
I also found something else...
On the RSVP card.. it should be forward, and not foward. Other than that, looks good to me!!!
Ok, great!!
Thank you! I appreciate the help!
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Posted 5/12/08 1:31 PM
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SB7308
I'm married!!!!!!
Member since 6/07 6950 total posts
Wedding Date:
7/3/2008 7:00 PM
Wed. Location:
Windows on the Lake
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
No need to capitalize Joy & Look (on the RSVP)
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Posted 5/12/08 1:33 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by SB7308
No need to capitalize Joy & Look (on the RSVP)
Thank you!! Fixed that!
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Posted 5/12/08 1:38 PM
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SparkyandAng
215 Invited 113-YES 18-NO
Member since 9/07 4159 total posts
Wedding Date:
10/24/2008 7:00 PM
Wed. Location:
TSC
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Looks good Kim.
Love the wording.
We just orderd on Saturday and I wasn't feeling creative and am not really happy with the way the wording was.
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Posted 5/12/08 1:42 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by KK Holiday
sounds lovely Kim!
Thank you!!!
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Posted 5/12/08 1:43 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by SparkyandAng
Looks good Kim.
Love the wording.
We just orderd on Saturday and I wasn't feeling creative and am not really happy with the way the wording was.
Ohhhh Nooo!!! That stinks! Any way to change it, since it was only a few days ago?
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Posted 5/12/08 1:43 PM
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SB7308
I'm married!!!!!!
Member since 6/07 6950 total posts
Wedding Date:
7/3/2008 7:00 PM
Wed. Location:
Windows on the Lake
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by Kimbalina
Posted by SB7308
No need to capitalize Joy & Look (on the RSVP)
Thank you!! Fixed that!
Welcome!
What about putting this on one line?
Saturday, The Eighth of November
Will it fit?
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Posted 5/12/08 1:47 PM
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yelley77
250 invited 151 Y 41 N
Member since 5/07 13188 total posts
Wedding Date:
9/19/2008 6:00 PM
Wed. Location:
Jericho Terrace
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Kim, i love it!! sounds great.
But you have certain words capitalized and I don't think they should be..
Because you have shared
In our lives with your
Friendship and Love
Parents
Marriage
Evening
Message edited 5/12/2008 1:48:23 PM.
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Posted 5/12/08 1:47 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by yelley77
Kim, i love it!! sounds great.
But you have certain words capitalized and I don't think they should be..
Because you have shared
In our lives with your
Friendship and Love
Parents
Marriage
Evening
Ok,, changed those items
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Posted 5/12/08 2:04 PM
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JB1122
Final Count: 201
Member since 5/07 3498 total posts
Wedding Date:
8/29/2008 3:00 PM
Wed. Location:
Land's End
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Declines with REGRET (not regrets)
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Posted 5/12/08 2:05 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by JB1122
Declines with REGRET (not regrets)
ok,.. thank you!!!
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Posted 5/12/08 2:10 PM
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Medinatobe
Board Fanatic
Member since 12/07 619 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/14/2008 8:30 PM
Wed. Location:
Leonard's
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
I'm not really good with invite ettique (? spelling) but I think it might be regret instead of regrets on the rsvp card. Other than that, looks perfect to me.
ok, never mind someone just posted this and i missed it.
Message edited 5/12/2008 2:11:52 PM.
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Posted 5/12/08 2:11 PM
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kimNanthony
Perfection
Member since 2/07 3024 total posts
Wedding Date:
6/1/2008 3:30 PM
Wed. Location:
Villa Lombardi's
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
I have a suggestion that may make it flow better.
Instead of
Because you have shared
In our lives with your
Friendship and love, we
Kimberly XXX
and
Greg XXX
Together with our parents
What about this:
Because you have shared
In our lives with your
friendship and love,
together with our parents, we
Kimberly XXX
and
Greg XXX
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Posted 5/12/08 4:03 PM
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Kimbalina
220 invited 49 YES - 12 NO
Member since 1/07 13915 total posts
Wedding Date:
11/8/2008 6:00 AM
Wed. Location:
The Inn at East Wind
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Re: Proof Readers Needed!
Posted by kimNanthony
I have a suggestion that may make it flow better.
What about this:
Because you have shared
In our lives with your
friendship and love,
together with our parents, we
Kimberly XXX
and
Greg XXX
I like the wording! Thank you I have to show it to FH!
Thank you
Message edited 5/12/2008 4:14:03 PM.
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Posted 5/12/08 4:12 PM
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